Beta Readers Wanted

Hi everyone!

 

I'm looking for more beta readers for my WoC sequel. I'm looking for girls and guys, preferably 16+, who would like to read a New Adult fantasy. You don't have to read book 1, but it would be helpful because book 1 sets up a lot of the story.

I'll have more information towards the end of the summer once I get feedback from round 1. So, if you want to read the first one, this gives you plenty of time to check out Amazon or my Etsy shop and get yourself a copy!

I'll be emailing you the second draft of my book with questions at the end of every chapter for you to answer. You will have a set time (to be determined) to read and fill out the questions and email it back to me. This draft is not professionally edited yet. I'm just looking for feedback on the story itself. Plot holes, inconsitencies, anything confusing, overall entertainment value.

 

Keep an eye out for more information as the time gets closer. Hope to hear from you!

Story Snippet from New Witch On Campus

Here is a snippet from the first draft of my second book in my Witches of Coolersville series, New Witch on Campus. I'm having so much fun writing this and I've definitely turned up the drama level as this scene shows. Enjoy!

“You didn’t have to be so rude back there,” Tara continued. “You embarrassed me in front of my friends.”

“Oh, your new boyfriend?” Henry demanded.

“He’s not my boyfriend, you idiot,” said Tara. “You are. Michael’s just a friend.”

Henry let out a short laugh that sounded almost like a bark. “Oh, is he? He seemed to be getting pretty cozy over there. Applied for the same school as you. You and Marissa suggesting he work for your grandma. I saw the way he was looking at you. He’s got more than friendship on his mind. He might even be in love with you.”

Tara was taken aback at this statement. She tried to will herself to keep her expression indifferent but she felt the heat rise in her cheeks. “And, how do you know that, Henry James?” He winced when she used his first and middle name. “Are you psychic all of a sudden?”

“I know because it’s the same way I feel about you!” he shouted.

Tara glared at him. “Well, aren’t you just…” Suddenly what he said hit her. “Wait… what?”

Henry sighed. “That’s not how I wanted to tell you. But, I love you, Tara. And, I’m pissed at you at the same time.” He waited for a minute. “Well, don’t just stare at me. Say something, damn you!”

Tara just gaped at him. Her mind was screaming a thousand different things but she couldn’t get her voice to work. Henry rolled his eyes and turned to go and she forced herself to speak. “Don’t get mad at me. You freakin’ blindsided me! I don’t know what to say. You can’t blame me for that.”

“Whatever,” grumbled Henry. “Let me know when you have something to say. See you in class.” He walked away and she stood rooted to the spot for what felt like an eternity.

Story Snippet- second draft

Hi, everyone. I haven't posted in ages, I know. Been busy. Doctor appointments and getting ready to go back to day job as soon as possible. In between, I've been writing like mad. Finally almost done with draft number 2 of my book and slowly sending it out to beta readers and getting ready for draft number three!

For a little treat, I thought I'd give you a little snippet of a scene between my main character, Tara, and a particular young man named Henry. Could he be a love interest? This scene takes place after people in town have come down with a mystery illness. Henry goes to see Tara after 2 weeks of not talking.

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“How are you feeling?” he asked.

“Better,” said Tara, trying to sound indifferent. “You?”

“Better.” Awkward pause. “Look, I’m sorry. I wanted to come see you the next day but my mom and aunt were driving me crazy. They still think I’m 8 and not 18.”

“That’s family for you,” said Tara with a smirk. “Gran made me stay home all that time. I had to fight to go back to work.”

“And, you must think I’m a complete creep after the way we said good bye last time.” He smiled when she turned red. Tara’s heart skipped a beat as he moved closer and took her hand. Gray eyes met green as he whispered, “Did you think I forgot our first kiss?”

Now, her heart really raced. It felt like it was pounding in her throat, making it impossible to speak. He leaned in closer. She closed her eyes and she felt his hand wrap around her waist. His fingers traveled slowly around her body, sending goose bumps up and down her spine. He pulled her closer and used his other arm to pull her arm around him. He ran a finger down her cheek, causing her to shudder. When she opened her eyes, their faces were barely inches apart. Her eyes were locked on his and she felt like she would drown in them.

“Henry…” Nothing else came out of her mouth because it was suddenly occupied in a kiss. She tightened her arm around him just so she could stand on legs that were quickly turning to rubber.

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Here you go! Please let me know in the comments what you think. Is there room for improvement? Fine the way it is? Scrap the whole thing and make them have a knock-down, drag-out fist fight? (Not a real option) Enjoy!